The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children s activities The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate

Essay topics:

The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The given pie charts compare the participation in the cultural and leisure activities by boys and girls.

overall, the boys were most interested in computer games and least in reading while girls mostly took part in dancing and low in listening music.

To commence with, boys mostly preferred to participate in computer games and basketball at about 34% and 26% respectively whereas almost half of the girls liked dancing and reading at 27% and 18%.Both boys and girls had similar 10% participants in listening to music activities. however it is clearly seen that only 2% of boys chose reading while 21% girls took part in reading activities.

The outdoor games like soccer was played by 17% boys and netball was enjoyed by 15% girls.Similarly indoor games basketball was chosen by 26% boys and 11% girls selected to play gymnastics.More than a quarter of boys and girls selected basketball and dancing.Lastly the proportion of computer game players was almost double in boys than girls.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Overall
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Suggestion: Both
...iked dancing and reading at 27% and 18%.Both boys and girls had similar 10% particip...
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...pants in listening to music activities. however it is clearly seen that only 2% of boys...
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Suggestion: however,
...pants in listening to music activities. however it is clearly seen that only 2% of boys...
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Suggestion: to read
...clearly seen that only 2% of boys chose reading while 21% girls took part in reading ac...
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Suggestion: Similarly
...ys and netball was enjoyed by 15% girls.Similarly indoor games basketball was chosen by 2...
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Suggestion: Similarly,
...ys and netball was enjoyed by 15% girls.Similarly indoor games basketball was chosen by 2...
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Suggestion: More
...d 11% girls selected to play gymnastics.More than a quarter of boys and girls select...
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Suggestion: Lastly
...d girls selected basketball and dancing.Lastly the proportion of computer game players...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, lastly, similarly, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12883435583 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8550884362 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546012269939 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.7408910441 43.030603864 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 167.2 112.824112599 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6 22.9334400587 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.23603664747 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150943300051 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108584645132 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967422885836 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123714444481 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101340355489 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.2329268293 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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