The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by saddam019 on Sat, 07/13/2019 - 12:31

The schemes illustrates a public park when it was first opened and the park alternation of present day.

Overall, it can observe that there have significant change on park today than when it was first started. If we closer look to the park, basic module and natural view as same as when it was first opened.

First of all, we look from western side. in 1920 there was a seat nearly to the rose garden.rose garden but remained unchanged but seats demolished. Entrance never moved and kept as like as past. Pond for water plants replaced by children’s play area and it is most significant alternation.

Follow at eastern side, there had a seat and bottom of the seats had a glasshouse. Two of them reconstructed by water feature. Established an entrance underground car park to the outside of the park. In 1920 there was an exclusive feature called fountain. Nowadays it rebuild by rose garden surrounded by seats belongs to four side. North-east side there had a rose garden and the garden renovated by cafe.Stage for musicians were removed by amphitheatre for concerts where band team perform today. Bottom of the amphitheatre there had also a rose garden but this demolished. Left side of this rose garden there was a seats that also vanished from park.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'illustrate'.
Suggestion: illustrate
The schemes illustrates a public park when it was first opened ...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...irst of all, we look from western side. in 1920 there was a seat nearly to the ros...
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Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rebuilds'?
Suggestion: rebuilds
...ve feature called fountain. Nowadays it rebuild by rose garden surrounded by seats belo...
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Line 7, column 407, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Stage
...garden and the garden renovated by cafe.Stage for musicians were removed by amphithea...
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Line 7, column 617, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a seat' or simply 'seats'?
Suggestion: a seat; seats
...Left side of this rose garden there was a seats that also vanished from park.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84792626728 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71848782407 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0380411753 43.030603864 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.1333333333 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4666666667 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168434309537 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611322286485 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742009348464 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139852105669 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893502856792 0.0819641961636 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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