The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012

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The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012.

Given are two maps depicting the considerable alteration made to the layout of a small theater in a 2-year period, starting from 2010.
It is conspicuous that the theater was renovated by adding numerous facilities and enlarging the area.

First, in the foreground of the theater, This area also was widened to the west. ….the ticket office and the admin office were replaced by a new restaurant on the left-hand side so the admin office was moved to the north of the restaurant. Meanwhile, the ticket office was located in the former site of the café on the right-hand corner.

At the back of the theater, a new space was erected to move the storage from the erstwhile site on the west to the east of the theater. In the meantime, the preceding space of the storage room was broadened and transformed into a media with showers inside. Thus, the media was replaced by the hall, and the stage was reconstructed one-and-a-half times the size of the former. By contrast, the auditorium remained at the same position over the given period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 229, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a medium' or simply 'media'?
Suggestion: a medium; media
...room was broadened and transformed into a media with showers inside. Thus, the media wa...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 867.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79005524862 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69866740729 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2121859621 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101317899614 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460370751725 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592449506771 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791045471297 0.15604864568 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578730312213 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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