the proportion of workers in three different sectors in South Korea between 1981 and 2011

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the proportion of workers in three different sectors in South Korea between 1981 and 2011

The graph illustrates the rate of the workforce in three distinct sectors in South Korea from 1981 to 2011.
Overall, the proportion of employees in Services always increased, while there was a downward pattern in that of Agriculture and Industry over the course of 30 years. Particularly, in oppose with the continuous decline in the rate of workers in the agriculture, there was a slight increase in the rate of industrial jobs.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in services, the percentage of employment steadily grew by roughly 5 percent over the first 10 years, before steeply rose to peak at roughly 70 percent in 2011. In industry, a similar trend was seen in the first 10-years period when the rate of employment soared from closely 30 percent in 1981 to approximate 35 percent in 1991, before plummeted to nearly the point as it was in the 1981 figure. As for agriculture, it was also evidence that their proportion of employment constantly plunged during the period illustrated in the graph. It stood at nearly 33 percent in 1981, then shrank by approximately 7 times to hit a low at closely 5 percent in 2011.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'evidenced'.
Suggestion: evidenced
...figure. As for agriculture, it was also evidence that their proportion of employment con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, look, so, then, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81174820468 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.748819226 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.142857143 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182894353644 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959714421992 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117178898523 0.0843802449381 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173373955681 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147085489557 0.0819641961636 179% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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