Some people think that government should give money to creative people such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that creative people like artists and musicians should receive financial support from the government. I completely agree with this statement and think that money should be offered for these talented people.
First of all, people like musicians and artists of a country are often paid less than they deserve. In other words, people like them use their creativity and skills in the form of arts, paintings and music. However, the money that they receive through the sale of the art or by entertaining thousands of people is really low in figure. To illustrate this, an artist so called ‘Adam Thigh’ was recently interviewed on television where he expressed his poor financial situation despite selling artefacts and paintings. Hence, the government should take the responsibility of supporting these poor individuals.
Secondly, artists and musicians play an vital role in preserving a country’s culture and traditions. Even though, musicians are considered as a form of entertainment for many, they also maintain the value of traditional musics through the use of historical musical instruments. Similarly, the artefacts and paintings made by various artist are often bought by tourists and this has became a way of promoting our culture to an international level. For instance, the Madison painting of the 1960s is a valuable piece of art from a German artist which is still hanged on the UK museum. So, I believe these creativity should be appreciated in the form of money.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that the government should offer money to artists and musicians because of their poor economic situation and the role they play in promoting our traditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 965.302439024 149% => OK
No of words: 272.0 196.424390244 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28676470588 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9461722278 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 106.607317073 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555147058824 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 283.868780488 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4404458073 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.615384615 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9230769231 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 5.23603664747 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221013798782 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851241416568 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555261705905 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157874094643 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584557165633 0.0819641961636 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 40.7170731707 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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