Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Children's development is one of the most outstanding, as well as controversial issues all over the world. However, some individuals argue that outdoor activities are more beneficial for a child's evolution than playing computer games. I completely agree with this notion and express my opinion in the following paragraphs with smooth examples, before a reasoned conclusion.
On the one hand, at the present, the majority of youngsters are being a fan of playing computer games. Mainly because the revolution is adversely affecting the generations in the last few decades. For instance, today, lots of modern technologies are ascertaining by intelligent scientists, and as a result of this consequence, these kinds of items have been attracting the attention of adolescents, who should study hard in order to achieve success in this period. This procedure influence negatively to their active lifestyle and causes detrimental, as well as dangerous diseases like cancer or obesity. Therefore, indoor tasks are the least preferred chances by most of the parents to develop children's outlook.
On the other hand, outdoor activities perform a tremendous role in the human lifespan. That is because of the benefits of outdoor actions outweigh than indoors. The first and foremost merit is becoming healthy. For example, if a person instantaneously occupies with beneficial sports or exercises, this will activate the cycle system of blood and can reduce the number of heart diseases, or high blood pressure illnesses. The second advantage is outdoor actions assists to be sociable with society and integrate bonds among the individuals. Furthermore, some inhabitants highly prefer these types of tasks as researchers recommend them.
In conclusion, being healthy, and co-operation overshadowed indoor tasks like playing computer games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 965.302439024 161% => OK
No of words: 279.0 196.424390244 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56630824373 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04281865895 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 106.607317073 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63082437276 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 283.868780488 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.4423069244 43.030603864 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.533333333 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1333333333 5.23603664747 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230586664857 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693128999703 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818804596388 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135452796072 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761830558697 0.0819641961636 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 61.2550243902 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.06136585366 129% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 40.7170731707 253% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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