Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion

Having healthy life is the positive side learning food and the way to cook up for students. Granted, that teenagers should spend time to study important subject which fit with their-self, making them more satisfy when they take up.

Learners can gain the necessary knowledge taking the course of food like their body more forceful, and it leads them to have life expectancy. Since they learn plenty of skills the way to make and prepare food with high vitamin, they often decide to filter their consumption due to know the composition of some diets. For example, there are around 80% of students at Culinary university in Malang, they prefer to create the fast food like chicken nuggets with their-self because they can arrange the ingredients like Vitamin A, B and Protein for their body, and this success to increase their immunity. If those scholars do this in every day, they would lake of another knowledge such as technology in my opinion.

However, learning another discipline is important for the adolescents because they can compete with others in another field, and it will make them having more opportunities when they want to apply some jobs. This is because the competition in their age increase over the years, and this obtains them to have more science. If they more study another subject like computer, they will have new skills, and it tends to gain better chance. According to the survey from University of Indonesia, they invent that youngsters learning another subjects like programming, and this shows around 70 of them more likely to achieve by managers in Unilever Indonesia. Therefore, I believe that students can add their skills through the Internet like Youtube because there are plethora resources for them to study computer science.

In conclusion, it is considered that students can maintain their body well regarding to study the methods making and preparing foods, but they should study another subject as technologies, making their capabilities increase. Where possible, if the students learn subject which can help them increase and maintain their skill and healthier.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 5.60731707317 856% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 965.302439024 186% => OK
No of words: 349.0 196.424390244 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14613180516 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 3.73543355544 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54509012895 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 106.607317073 169% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515759312321 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 283.868780488 193% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.482926829268 1449% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7050185381 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.153846154 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8461538462 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 5.23603664747 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130004853112 0.215688989381 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582154908775 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039944358167 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104556446951 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382584450826 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.2329268293 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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