The table below gives information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given tabular chart depicts the information about the people aged 30-50 ,in eight different countries are spending their favorite time in these 7 different activities(tv,sport,reading,hobbies,music,beach and sleep).the data is calibrated in per centum .
It can bee seen that ,Canadians ,Australians ,and Americans like watching tv near about 60%.The percentage of chinese and koreans in the same activity is 15% and 22%. Apart from all this the highest percentage of Japanese ,koreans ,chinese ,and french in reading is 62%,60%,60%,and 30 compared with other pastime activities whereas both australians and americans just like reading 15%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... information about the people aged 30-50 ,in eight different countries are spendin...
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Suggestion: , sport
...e time in these 7 different activitiestv,sport,reading,hobbies,music,beach and sleep.t...
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...e 7 different activitiestv,sport,reading,hobbies,music,beach and sleep.the data is calib...
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...activitiestv,sport,reading,hobbies,music,beach and sleep.the data is calibrated in per...
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...eep.the data is calibrated in per centum . It can bee seen that ,Canadians...
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...the data is calibrated in per centum . It can bee seen that ,Canadians ,Austral...
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...er centum . It can bee seen that ,Canadians ,Australians ,and Americans li...
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...ericans like watching tv near about 60%.The percentage of chinese and koreans in t...
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...0%.The percentage of chinese and koreans in the same activity is 15% and 22%. Apa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 33.7804878049 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 549.0 965.302439024 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 94.0 196.424390244 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84042553191 4.92477711251 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.11373725848 3.73543355544 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.03193128033 2.65546596893 189% => OK
Unique words: 75.0 106.607317073 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.797872340426 0.547539520022 146% => OK
syllable_count: 156.6 283.868780488 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.0770779797 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.0 112.824112599 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920362631124 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582218346862 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516719217964 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782595777189 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529572527071 0.0819641961636 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 13.2329268293 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 61.2550243902 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.3012195122 161% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.18 11.4140731707 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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