A small town near Melbourne shows mangnificiant changes that took place over the period of time. The maps outlines the major changes that took place in Tarnagul, Melbourne.
Starting from 1900, a dairy was separated from rest of the town by a river. Later on it was transformed to a lemons and grapefruits area in 1950. Also after 50 years, the same area was converted into a wildlife sanctuary. The area under the oranges were doubled in 1950 as it took over the place of mandarins which were earlier seen in the year 1900. But the same area was left unused after 50 years.
Packing sheds also found their way back in 19550 in the north east direction of the town and was later transformed into local museum and craft market in 2000 with a path between them. Also a road crossing the river and the middle of town area was seen as it is from 1900 till 2000.
In addition to that, a park and a tourist shop was developed near the south east side of the Tarangal . Besides that area under town was firstly increased in 1950 and later on decreased after 50 years.
All in all, a lot of major changes can be seen in the map of the small town named Tarnagul in Melbourne.
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- Tarnagul is a small town near Melbourne The maps show the town s development over a period of time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words Writing Task 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: period
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Suggestion: outline
...place over the period of time. The maps outlines the major changes that took place in Ta...
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Suggestion: Also,
... a lemons and grapefruits area in 1950. Also after 50 years, the same area was conve...
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Suggestion: Also,
...arket in 2000 with a path between them. Also a road crossing the river and the middl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he river and the middle of town area was seen as it is from 1900 till 2000. In a...
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Suggestion: .
...near the south east side of the Tarangal . Besides that area under town was firstl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 952.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 218.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36697247706 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24410526124 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52752293578 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8785644455 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3333333333 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140101957387 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061775322319 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776147504245 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099829388086 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704001605607 0.0819641961636 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.2329268293 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 11.4140731707 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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