writing task 1: the birth rates of China and America

Essay topics:

writing task 1: the birth rates of China and America

The picture below illustrates shifts in the birth rates between China and USA over the course 80 years starting in 1920

Looking at the graph it is clearly obvious that both nations witness a downward trend and the number of people were born in china registers the highest figure in 1950.

In china, the fertility rate stood at 10 in 1920. This figure increased slightly to 15 in 1935 before reaching the low rate at 5 between 1940 and 1945. However, there was a sharp rise in the number of birth rates from 1945 and hit the peak at 20 in 1950. Then, after 1950 it was witnessed a downward trend till 2000.

In the America, there was a fluctuation from 1920 to 1940 before hitting the bottom at 4 in the year 1945. Next, the number of birth rates rose dramatically and hit the peak at 15 which was less, compared to china in 1950. The downward trend was witnessed in the number of people were born in the America , which declined sharply between 1950 and 2000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver the course 80 years starting in 1920 Looking at the graph it is clearly obvio...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...umber of people were born in the America , which declined sharply between 1950 and...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 795.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46629213483 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20059262668 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511235955056 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 216.9 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2846258199 43.030603864 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.375 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210243329645 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105247948742 0.103423049105 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656120072515 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142276402886 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548423457326 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.98 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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