Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter regards to the vacant position at the City Museum Shop in Birmingham. I have read an advertisement you did in the local English newspaper. I am pursuing my postgraduation from UBC college, and I want to work at any part-time job during the time of my studies in Birmingham.
My name is Shwatank Bhasin, and I have worked a part-time job at a local Historian Museum in London while completing my Bachelors in Engineering. In those span of time, I got many skills and acquire knowledge about the preservation of antique and valuable items in the Museum with great care. Plus, I was a punctual, polite, effective communicator with colleagues as well as visitors too.
The main reason for my interest in this job is I have free time overcoming these holidays and you are also looking for someone who has enormous experience as well as knowledge, however, you mentioned that you are looking for temporary staff on a contractual basis which perfectly suits me with the position. I would be grateful if you will consider me for this temporary position.
I am looking forward to your prompt and positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Shain Bhasin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...you did in the local English newspaper. I am pursuing my postgraduation from UBC ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 5.60731707317 535% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91089108911 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89965501668 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628712871287 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5306738715 43.030603864 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303796056252 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100068636875 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757179752175 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146896225614 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901627668151 0.0819641961636 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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