you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work.You phoned the shop but no action was taken.Write a letter to shop manager.In your letter- Describe the problem with equipment-Explain what happened when you phoned the shop-Say

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you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work.You phoned the shop but no action was taken.
Write a letter to shop manager.
In your letter
- Describe the problem with equipment
-Explain what happened when you phoned the shop
-Say what you would like the manager to do.

The depicted bar chart represents the number of male/female students studying in marketing, accounting, finance, economics, engineering and mathematics at US university in the year of 2000.
In general, finance belonged to the most popular subject among both sexes in 2010, while the opposite was true for the engineering. Besides, there was a biggest difference in the number of males and females enrolling in mathematics
As can be seen from the chart, the data on finance experienced an equal with approximately 230 students each gender. In the marketing and accounting, the dominance of woman when comparing with men were about 50 students and 30 students, respectively.
studying mathematics became the second most popular among men with 200 students, whereas woman did arround 140 students students less then their males counterparts. The difference of male was more prevailing in economics subject, where more 70 men students chose this subject as a major, almost doubling that for female economic student. Only about 50 students each gender studied engineering.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...les and females enrolling in mathematics As can be seen from the chart, the data ...
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...students and 30 students, respectively. studying mathematics became the second m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, second, then, whereas, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 909.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47590361446 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97239562031 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638554216867 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4603772505 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.857142857 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.23603664747 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0426535050933 0.215688989381 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0218224410309 0.103423049105 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0143026017185 0.0843802449381 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0268695000547 0.15604864568 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160024278946 0.0819641961636 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 11.4140731707 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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