You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
The pie charts give information about the proportions of the occupations of Australian students what they did directly after leaving educational institution in the years 1980, 1990 and 2000.
It is noticeable that half of Australian people continued to study after secondary school in 1980 but it declined in twenty years later. Proportionally, we can also see an increase in the proportion of unemployed and employed leavers within 2-decade period.
In 1980, almost 50% of Australian student studied further education but 40% of the rest of students got jobs immediately.However, the figure for advanced level had an sharp decrease and were much less percentage on average than that of the employed people ( with 38% and 50% respectively ) in ten years later.
The proportion of Australians who continued to study had an slight decline by only 1%, while, there was a rise of 5% in the percentage of those who were the employees, from 50% to 55%, in 2000. Unemployed people see rose between 10% in 1980 and 12% in 1990, but that had a twofold decrease in next ten years later.
- Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience 78
- Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and see it as an opportunity to make positive changes to the world To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism What changes would you like to see in the new century 73
- The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should spend about 20 minutes on this task 56
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- You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You sho 79
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...e rest of students got jobs immediately.However, the figure for advanced level had an s...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ever, the figure for advanced level had an sharp decrease and were much less perce...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...average than that of the employed people with 38% and 50% respectively in ten ye...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed people with 38% and 50% respectively in ten years later. The proportion of...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... Australians who continued to study had an slight decline by only 1%, while, there...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97790055249 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.992241935 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596685082873 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1937283964 43.030603864 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.166666667 112.824112599 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1666666667 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.23603664747 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100643474932 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591720924215 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663266752849 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0764523625269 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675626913924 0.0819641961636 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.2329268293 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.