09.10.2017You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw.Write a letter to the company.In your letter,Introduce your self.explain the situation.say what action you would like to company to take.

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09.10.2017
You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw.Write a letter to the company.In your letter,
Introduce your self.
explain the situation.
say what action you would like to company to take.

Dear Sir,
Hope you are doing well.I am writing this letter in reference to highlight an issue on a recent purchase of a new laptop from your store.

my name is Mick Arthur. I bought the Lenovo laptop, model number XDG3455R from your electronic shop last week on Friday. After that I have used it, the overall performance looks fine but there is a major flaw which I have discovered during my usage. The issue is that the laptop's battery does not charge properly. I have tried to change the charging ports and the sockets and neither works additionally I have tried to use a different charging cable and it does not work either. I am highly dissatisfied with the performance of this laptop as I was not expecting these issues at such an early stage.

So in the above context, I request you to change this laptop and offer a new replacement as the product is covered under warranty and it has just been a few days since I have bought it.

I look forward to your immediate action and help on the same.

Yours sincerely
Mick

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nd help on the same. Yours sincerely Mick
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 849.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51595744681 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42050500924 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63829787234 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6896699569 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 4.34317383033 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234859116545 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828526481008 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533794477829 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135932500292 0.12726935374 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028769172592 0.0580467560999 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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