During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants Write a letter to the businessman In your letter Remi

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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to the businessman. In your letter,
• Remind him when and where you met.
• Tell him what kind of a job you are interested in.
• Say why you think you would be suitable for the job.

Dear Sir,
I hope this letter finds you in good health. I am Dwarakesh, we met in a flight from Bangalore to Chennai last week. We were discussing the positive and negative aspects involved in running Saravana Bhavan, which I found insightful.
You had asked me to right to you about a possible job offer in one of your restaurants. I hold a M.B.A degree in marketing, along with five years of work experience across various fields. My current designation is Area Sales Manager, which involves supervising 6 people. I report directly to CEO and CFO of the organisations. I am also a part of the team involved in implementing corporate strategy across Chennai. I have also recruited and trained people for various roles in this organisations. I am interested and experienced in the above-mentioned roles and responsibilities.
I conclude this letter, with a note that I will be suitable for various roles and responsibilities in your esteemed organization. I will work to the best of my abilities and with an intent to acquire new knowledge and skills.
Thank you for your time,
Yours respectfully,
Dwarakesh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ffer in one of your restaurants. I hold a M.B.A degree in marketing, along with f...
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Suggestion: A
...n one of your restaurants. I hold a M.B.A degree in marketing, along with five ye...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ting corporate strategy across Chennai. I have also recruited and trained people ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...and trained people for various roles in this organisations. I am interested and expe...
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...or various roles in this organisations. I am interested and experienced in the ab...
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...entioned roles and responsibilities. I conclude this letter, with a note that ...
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...bilities in your esteemed organization. I will work to the best of my abilities a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 935.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02688172043 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28013391942 2.54303337028 129% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634408602151 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.5018920318 44.8134815571 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.9230769231 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3076923077 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.615384615385 4.34317383033 14% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138386587009 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472378415843 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822280547633 0.0603063233224 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091999629925 0.12726935374 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421430413383 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 7.45979381443 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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