General Traning Task 1You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates You have not had hot water or heating for some time The landlord s workmen have tried to fix the problem but

Submitted by Jaypreet on Mon, 07/02/2018 - 07:28

Dear sir,
I want to inform you that i am a student of English language school. I am living in private accommodation with other room mates.
Now the winter season is coming. We all need hot water.but our wayer heater is not working.l saw it the plumber .he fix the problem. But after some time again same problem accure.the plumber also suggest us to buy a new one.it is very old one.that reason it not heating the water.we all have to go the school early in the morning.
So we need it very much.please fix this problem. Buy a new one if it is not going to repair. We all want it.so we can easly continue our study. We all are very thankful to you.we can consontrat our study.
Thankig you,
Your faithfully,

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Average: 3.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 27, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
Dear sir, I want to inform you that i am a student of English language school...
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Line 3, column 5, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'winter'.
Suggestion: winter
...commodation with other room mates. Now the winter season is coming. We all need hot water.but ou...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ater is not working.l saw it the plumber .he fix the problem. But after some time ...
^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'fixes'.
Suggestion: fixes
...is not working.l saw it the plumber .he fix the problem. But after some time again ...
^^^
Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...all want it.so we can easly continue our study. We all are very thankful to you.w...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 26.3917525773 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 582.0 937.175257732 62% => OK
No of words: 133.0 206.0 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37593984962 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.39596269041 3.78020617076 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41544205829 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 127.690721649 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.676691729323 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 180.0 290.88556701 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7863227878 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.2 76.5299724578 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3 16.8248392259 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.7 4.34317383033 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20369572375 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753096843972 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746134077484 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155556579131 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100306534381 0.0580467560999 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 8.37731958763 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 8.71597938144 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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