You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store however you are not pleased with service you received Describe the situation Explain why you are dissertation Say what you want to manage to do

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You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however,you are not pleased with service you received.
Describe the situation
Explain why you are dissertation
Say what you want to manage to do

Dear sir,
I want to inform you that i had recently fixed computer at a local computer store.lam not pleased with that service.
In computer has number of problem.The keyboard was not working.Some buttons are not working.They does not fixed it.The window of the computer are lost.Computer has anti-virus. Any time while doing the important work.Computer just automatically off.while doing work nothing is save.The computer model is Samsung. When l brought it.They provide me one year guarantee. But after four month.the computer giving me lot of problem.
Please do a favour for me.Repair my computer. I need it very urgent.because l had make my project.
I am waiting for your positive answer,
Thank you,
Your faithfully,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 27, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
Dear sir, I want to inform you that i had recently fixed computer at a local ...
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Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ce. In computer has number of problem.The keyboard was not working.Some buttons ...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...puter has number of problem.The keyboard was not working.Some buttons are not wor...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Some
...f problem.The keyboard was not working.Some buttons are not working.They does not f...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ot working.Some buttons are not working.They does not fixed it.The window of the com...
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Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...rking.Some buttons are not working.They does not fixed it.The window of the computer...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'fix'
Suggestion: fix
...e buttons are not working.They does not fixed it.The window of the computer are lost....
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... are not working.They does not fixed it.The window of the computer are lost.Compute...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Computer
... it.The window of the computer are lost.Computer has anti-virus. Any time while doing th...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Computer
...Any time while doing the important work.Computer just automatically off.while doing work...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ly off.while doing work nothing is save.The computer model is Samsung. When l broug...
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Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is save.The computer model is Samsung. When l brought it.They provide me one year g...
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Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ter model is Samsung. When l brought it.They provide me one year guarantee. But afte...
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Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...e me one year guarantee. But after four month.the computer giving me lot of problem. ...
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Line 4, column 26, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Repair
... of problem. Please do a favour for me.Repair my computer. I need it very urgent.beca...
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Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...er. I need it very urgent.because l had make my project. I am waiting for your posi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 26.3917525773 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 615.0 937.175257732 66% => OK
No of words: 116.0 206.0 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30172413793 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.28181803491 3.78020617076 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11065972487 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 127.690721649 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.76724137931 0.622605031667 123% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 290.88556701 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1923627345 44.8134815571 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.875 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 4.34317383033 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322136897709 0.216113520407 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124833798745 0.0766984524023 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143632471507 0.0603063233224 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180632026036 0.12726935374 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199361333169 0.0580467560999 343% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 7.45979381443 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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