A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback form the general public Write letter to the company in

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback form the general public.
Write letter to the company in your letter
• Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• Summarizes the benefits of paying for the concerts
• Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter as feedback asked by your company about the money which your company wants to use either for sponsoring a local children’s sports team for two years or paying for two open-air concerts.

The advantage of sponsoring a sports team is the best utilization of your money as it will benefit society, children and your company. It will help to enhance the health of society as more children will be involved in the game, more families will be involved with their children's games and exercise. Children will become more enthusiastic about the game and physical activities, which will also teach them other skills such as sportsmanship, tolerance, and disciple. The company can also be benefitted by arranging a match between different teams and have a minimum ticket value for watching the same.

While arranging the concert company can get more profit as for the entry to the concert some sort of ticket or reservation can be made compulsory to raise funds. Apart from this, it will act as a stress buster for people who have a hectic and busy schedule.

In my point of view, supporting the children sports team will give better results as it will boost the courage of the children and will be a relaxing and enjoyable activity for all age groups.

I look forward to your action and hope you will do the best for society.

Yours Faithfully,
Jot

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, thus, while, apart from, as for, sort of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 239.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86192468619 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55024267074 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569037656904 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 348.3 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.6961197967 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.2 76.5299724578 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9 16.8248392259 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350172107253 0.216113520407 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142834786078 0.0766984524023 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171258965631 0.0603063233224 284% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227767369678 0.12726935374 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218051779944 0.0580467560999 376% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 8.37731958763 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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