6 A large company in your areas has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the compa

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6. A large company in your areas has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter :
• Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir
Thank you for your letter requesting information about spending about money for either sponsoring a local children’s sports team or paying for two open air concerts. I hope the following advice will be of some help to you.
Needless to say, the benefits of supporting for the sport team financially can bring positve impact for both this team and your business. They will improve not only in their skills but also their potential ability, while they still receive the sponsorship brand. Morever, it will also rise your reputation in the bussiness field if you spend your money to support for the team.
On the other hand, holding the concert perhap is the good idea, because people enjoy the performance. Some local bands also have an opportunity to present their talent, which would collect some promoter for any products of your company.
I am sure that any of your iniatives will be of great benefit to our hometown. However, I believe that assisting to the sport team can bring more positive aspects to the whole community than organizing a concert. The concerts would be temporary entertainment for the locals, but the provision of young athletes would be remembered for a long time and would provide many reasons for celebration and pride.
I hope that you found these recommendations of use. Please don’t hesitate to contact me should you have any further questions.
Thanks for your attention in the matter.
Your sincerely,
Minh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...many reasons for celebration and pride. I hope that you found these recommendati...
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...on in the matter. Your sincerely, Minh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1222.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 243.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02880658436 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62020051282 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633744855967 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1218809053 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2857142857 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3571428571 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336344123362 0.216113520407 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10390433992 0.0766984524023 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127290281109 0.0603063233224 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171018163142 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126050481719 0.0580467560999 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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