A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntary unpaid work You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work In your letter explain why you w

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to show my interest in your advertisement, which was given on 9th December in The Times news, for part-time work as a volunteer position in the Loop museum. I have always been fond of sculptures and paintings, and I have published research papers on many. I have a unique approach to interpret any art. More than that, I have been rewarded several times in my school years. When I heard about this opportunity, I cannot resist myself, since it is near to my home and popular for its collection.

I have finished my school for this year, and I am looking for part-time jobs related to my study, which is arts. I would like to explain more about my interest in this position if we can schedule an interview. I have worked for another art museum as well. However, it did not have enough collection as yours. Thus, this summer, I am excited to join the Loop museum.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Yash Hirpara.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...have published research papers on many. I have a unique approach to interpret any...
^
Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sition if we can schedule an interview. I have worked for another art museum as w...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6724137931 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68555660807 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626436781609 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4245953731 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.75 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 4.34317383033 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220808159519 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846906499666 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819323357084 0.0603063233224 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174129937242 0.12726935374 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194120914611 0.0580467560999 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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