There have been several complaints about the reception area where the visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved.Write a letter to manager.Describe the complains that have been received.

Dear Shannon,

I am writing this letter regarding the recent issues of reception area, which have been sprawling up. I did a complete study by reading the letters from the complaint box, as well as pondered upon situations, which I encountered. Some issues are minor, whereas few are major ones.

Two such aspects are : 1. area of sitting 2. sitting arrangements. Being a successful entrepreneur, we have many clientele coming into our office. The first impression is our reception area which is quite conjusted and become old with time. Moreover, many people come in with inquiries and during peak hours it becomes difficult to accommodate.

What I can suggest is, we should clear up the store room which has some bare essentials. This room can be renovated with modern furniture, comfortable sitting area and a water fountain. There is also a spare air conditioner lying in the store room,which can be fixed up for the new sitting area. Store room as well as our reception should be freshly painted, as the paint is peeling off the walls.

I highly feel, that after our renovation fewer customers will have complaints. I hope I lived upto your expectations of doing a good research on the work listed out and you shall consider my inputs,

Regards,

Eleanor Roosevalt

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Area
...ajor ones. Two such aspects are : 1. area of sitting 2. sitting arrangements. Bei...
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Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sitting
...uch aspects are : 1. area of sitting 2. sitting arrangements. Being a successful entrep...
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Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... air conditioner lying in the store room,which can be fixed up for the new sitting are...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good research'.
Suggestion: good research
...I lived upto your expectations of doing a good research on the work listed out and you shall co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, whereas, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1072.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98604651163 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73290923138 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.693023255814 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 322.2 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4428002217 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5714285714 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3571428571 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 4.34317383033 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199081559579 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604737927476 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566517608084 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110882014389 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309497780462 0.0580467560999 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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