Training course Formal letter You wish to enrol in a course of your choice at an A ustralian college You have alreatly written a letter to the college asking for information but have received no reply Write a letter to the college explaining your concern

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Training course / Formal letter
You wish to enrol in a course (of your choice) at an A ustralian college. You have alreatly written a letter to the college asking for information but have received no reply.
Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in less than two months,
• you need to know if you can still enrol
• you also require further information about the course, including the cost.

Dear Sir
I am writing this letter once again to you to take information about the college. I have already written a letter to the college asking for this but I have received no reply yet.
I am a future singer. Six months ago I was a winner in Centiral Asie in “Young Stars” competition and was valued with gold medal. That`s why I am able to continue my studing at this Art college and I am sure it will be a big chance for me that I can be a proffesional singer in your college.
I know some information about your college but not completely. I require further information about the course, including the cost. Please, give me information in some days because I have no enough time to wait. Why it will start after two months.
I hope you can understand and follow what I have said and thank you !
Yours faithfully,
Sam Wilyam.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir I am writing this letter once again to y...
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Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ix months ago I was a winner in Centiral Asie in “Young Stars” competition and wa...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 691.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42948717949 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64506886599 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 127.690721649 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621794871795 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 290.88556701 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9421365618 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.1 76.5299724578 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 4.34317383033 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330466571047 0.216113520407 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11581939148 0.0766984524023 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125347966992 0.0603063233224 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193752948556 0.12726935374 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134237765961 0.0580467560999 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 8.37731958763 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 41.2886597938 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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