Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course. Mention - qualifications and work experience - details about the course - how this course will help you

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Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course. Mention - qualifications and work experience - details about the course - how this course will help you

Dear Sir,

I recently read about a scholarship programme that you are offering students who wish to do a part time course in Australia. I would like to be considered for the scholarship. I am enclosing my resume for your consideration.

my name is Indroop Singh and I belong to India. I have done my Bachelor’s of Computer Engineering from iit chennai and now I want to do a part time diploma course in International Business. I have always been a topper in my class and I have heard that you encourage meritorious students. The fee for the course is very high and if I don’t receive funding then I shall not be able to continue my studies.

The course would be very beneficial for me as today we belong to a global village. Whatever we do in life, we must know the basics of ‘International Business’. Only then we can survive the tough competition we have to face in today’s time. The scholarship I receive from you will help me to study further and also ease some burden off my parents’ shoulders. I will also be able to concentrate on my studies more as I will not have to worry about the expenses incurred.

you may contact my professors at iit chennai in case you need to ask anything about me. my contact number is 9888195776, if you have anything to clarify from me.

Yours faithfully,

Indroop

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by user Jeet Harshad Parikh :

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... are offering students who wish to do a part time course in Australia. I would like to be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e to be considered for the scholarship. I am enclosing my resume for your conside...
^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
...ing my resume for your consideration. my name is Indroop Singh and I belong to I...
^^
Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...from iit chennai and now I want to do a part time diploma course in International Busines...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 433, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... able to concentrate on my studies more as I will not have to worry about the expe...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...to worry about the expenses incurred. you may contact my professors at iit chenna...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, then, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 238.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64705882353 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12370020988 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554621848739 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 355.5 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8026954875 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7333333333 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8666666667 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160092296554 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565916658143 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05655568644 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111510603774 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527065869532 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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