Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course. Mention - qualifications and work experience - details about the course - how this course will help you

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course.

Mention

- qualifications and work experience

- details about the course

- how this course will help you

Dear Sir/Madam,

I recently read an advertisement about the scholarship programme that you are offering students who wish to do part-time course in India. I am writing this letter to consider my application for the scholarship and enclosing a copy of resume for your reference.

I did my bachelors in Chemical engineering from Mumbai University and thereafter, i started working as a 'project engineer in an oilfield company. my role as a project engineer is to execute nitrogen-helium leak detection services on a large-scale and make sure that it is completed in a timely manner. After attaining four years of work experience, i want to pursue a part-time diploma course in project management. The duration of the course is one year and it comprises of four key subjects like Operations methods, lean six-sigma principles, cost analysis and project planning.

this course will add more weightage to my resume and on successfully completing the course, i would be issued a certificate of 'project management Professional'. Moreover, this course will benefit me in getting a job in abroad with high salary and acquire a managerial position in near future.

I look forward to grant me a scholarship which would help to meet my desired goals.

Yours faithfully,

Jeet Parikh

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by user Jeet Harshad Parikh :

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir/Madam, I recently read an advertisement about t...
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...opy of resume for your reference. I did my bachelors in Chemical engineerin...
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... from Mumbai University and thereafter, i started working as a project engineer i...
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...roject engineer in an oilfield company. my role as a project engineer is to execut...
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...cale and make sure that it is completed in a timely manner. After attaining four years of work exp...
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...ttaining four years of work experience, i want to pursue a part-time diploma cour...
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...ration of the course is one year and it comprises of four key subjects like Operations metho...
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...es, cost analysis and project planning. this course will add more weightage to m...
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...t analysis and project planning. this course will add more weightage to my re...
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...my desired goals. Yours faithfully, Jeet Parikh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 207.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26570048309 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16659941633 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647342995169 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 341.1 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6460590728 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250655714268 0.216113520407 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848754003464 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620440454393 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137079235241 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588817017447 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 41.2886597938 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.