Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Mr Smith,
I am writing this to report you a technical problem encountered with our existing computer system of our premises, which we have been experiencing for last two months.
As you may be aware of the decreased performance of our computer systems, I would like to inform you regarding the cause of the problem, which I have just identified. Basically, all this is faced due to infection of malware to our intranet. This virus has been believed to get entered through use of the internet facility. From the internet, virus has been spread throughout all our office computers.
Diseased computers have been showing decreased performance speed. And it is taking long time to move from one screen to another. Consequently, the productivity has been impacted; hence, detrimental effects have also been seen over sales of our produces.
At the same time, I would also like to suggest some possible solution to resolve this situation from its base. I have come to know that out anti-virus software is outdated. And we will need to upgrade it for the betterment of this condition. I have already inquire for latest available firewall software, which are supplied with the bunch of other safety tools such as anti-phishing plug-in. I have enclosed the quotation and brochure for several software.
Please respond at the earliest so that we can proceed further.
Yours Sincerely,
Riddham Patel

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'inquired'.
Suggestion: inquired
...rment of this condition. I have already inquire for latest available firewall software,...
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Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun software seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some software'.
Suggestion: some software
...enclosed the quotation and brochure for several software. Please respond at the earliest so tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, hence, if, may, regarding, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07359307359 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77976690835 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9192523493 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1333333333 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 4.34317383033 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144088161838 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438306540668 0.0766984524023 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556551166184 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071120364571 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586216993139 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 41.2886597938 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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