Writing task 1 cambridge 13, test 1
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
-explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
-say how your work could be done while you are away
-ask for his-her help in arranging it
Dear Michelle,
I have been working in our international company ‘’Mobile toys’’ for six years and feel that I need some more challenges which made me think about working abroad for a while.
I am writing to you in regards to ask if I would be able to work in Shanghai, China for half a year in its head office. This would offer me a new experience, I could attend the local market to see their selling tricks and also see how their import and export work.
Most of my work would be still done on time. I can use the internet there, read e-mails and do all the necessary work through online. Although I am not able to meet my clients while I am away. Therefore I need your help to see if anyone could replace me to meet my clients.
I would highly appreciate if you would consider my request working six months in Shanghai.
Kind regards,
Mary
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... for a while. I am writing to you in regards to ask if I would be able to work in Shang...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... all the necessary work through online. Although I am not able to meet my clients while ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ble to meet my clients while I am away. Therefore I need your help to see if anyone could...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 738.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6125 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71482475263 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 127.690721649 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65625 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3529844036 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 4.34317383033 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283124964577 0.216113520407 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10201439001 0.0766984524023 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845448772785 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172235465145 0.12726935374 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431176213718 0.0580467560999 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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