You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to this friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend.

In your letter,

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Joseph,
Good news! I've finally received the invitation letter from National University of Singapore for their two years Master of Science program in Computer Science. I've accepted the offer and booked my tickets. I need your help to find a part-time job.

As you know already, I had applied for several universities because I didn't want to keep all of my eggs in the same basket. I've received admission offer from three universities. After a lot of brainstorming, I decided to go for National University of Singapore. That's because it has a huge reputation all over the world. It is a 2 years program which involves 10 modules and 1 major project. There will be classes in evening twice a week.

I want to do part-time job to cover my tuition fees, food and rental expenses. Singapore is such an expensive city and I don't want to be a burden on my parents by asking them to take care of these expenses. I would also have enough time on my hand outside the classes. Working on a part-time job will keep me occupied, and also give an opportunity to experience Singapore's culture more closely.

As you have spent six years in Singapore, you have made a lot of contacts. Can you please ask in friend circle if someone wants to teach programming to their kids? I already have some experience for that. Or can you give me contact details of some job consultancies which help students to find part-time jobs?

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Take care and stay fine.

Best wishes,
Ashfaq

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Joseph, Good news! Ive finally received the invitation letter ...
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...of Science program in Computer Science. Ive accepted the offer and booked my ticket...
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...lied for several universities because I didnt want to keep all of my eggs in the same...
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...keep all of my eggs in the same basket. Ive received admission offer from three uni...
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...o for National University of Singapore. Thats because it has a huge reputation all ov...
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...ngapore is such an expensive city and I dont want to be a burden on my parents by as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1252.0 937.175257732 134% => OK
No of words: 268.0 206.0 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67164179104 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67603657546 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608208955224 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 290.88556701 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 12.6804123711 158% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4446355165 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.6 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277753607339 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709923780323 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076288410158 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141651311351 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943450581995 0.0580467560999 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 8.37731958763 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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