You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Durgesh,
I hope you are doing great. Let me give an exciting news that I'll be coming to Toronto to pursue my master's from University of Toronto. I am really happy because we will be able to live and have fun together during our post-graduation period.
My first semester will be starting in the coming Spring season. Therefore, I'll be arriving on the 3rd of March around half past noon. Please make sure to pick me up from the Airport to your rental residence. I'll be staying for two years in your rental house and will give the half rent which will be convenient to both of us.
During my the time of master's, I would like to do a part-time job that will manage my living expenses such as house rent, food, groceries, bills and others. Also, many students work with part-time jobs to get some Canadian experience on their resumes.
I'll be sending my resume to you through email. Please review and provide your feedback on my resume. If the format of the resume will be fine, I'll apply for the jobs on the job bank portal of Canada.
I hope to see you soon and will be waiting for your response over my resume.
Regards,
Shwatank
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'exciting news'.
Suggestion: exciting news
...I hope you are doing great. Let me give an exciting news that Ill be coming to Toronto to pursue...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...in the coming Spring season. Therefore, Ill be arriving on the 3rd of March around ...
^^^
Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...m the Airport to your rental residence. Ill be staying for two years in your rental...
^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...anadian experience on their resumes. Ill be sending my resume to you through ema...
^^^
Line 9, column 144, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... the format of the resume will be fine, Ill apply for the jobs on the job bank port...
^^^
Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Ill) must be used with a third-person verb: 'applies'.
Suggestion: applies
... format of the resume will be fine, Ill apply for the jobs on the job bank portal of ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50476190476 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3068467548 2.54303337028 91% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4030729524 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7692307692 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170675240909 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648978298813 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057541897553 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11206263551 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406219972312 0.0580467560999 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.