You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter- Give details of your study plans- Explain why

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- Give details of your study plans
- Explain why you want to get a part-time job
- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Ram

You will be glad to know about that I have enrolled in a one year diploma course in computer programme which will enhance my skills in computer teaching profession.I am going to join this course in the "University of Sandarland" which is located in center London and a few miles away from you.

I am writing this letter to help me to find a job for me because you know my financial condition very well and if I could do a part time job during my course that will help me to get a small earning for that I will not have to depend on my parents earning.I will have to manage all the expenses of my study as well as living costs by myself that will be only possible if I do a job along with study.

Let me tell you about ability that what kind of work I could possibly handle.As working in any department store would be a cake walk for me and house cleaning also which require small efforts and less time.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours love

Radhe

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... skills in computer teaching profession.I am going to join this course in the &ap...
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Line 5, column 29, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...rom you. I am writing this letter to help me to find a job for me because you know my financ...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...condition very well and if I could do a part time job during my course that will help me ...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...ot have to depend on my parents earning.I will have to manage all the expenses of...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ot have to depend on my parents earning.I will have to manage all the expenses of...
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Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... about ability that what kind of work I could possibly handle.As working in any department sto...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...at kind of work I could possibly handle.As working in any department store would b...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, well, kind of, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 814.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 189.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30687830688 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46658472395 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597883597884 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 16.3608247423 226% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.878473931 44.8134815571 332% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.8 76.5299724578 213% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 37.8 16.8248392259 225% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 4.34317383033 253% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220109506071 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11579021399 0.0766984524023 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319141241349 0.0603063233224 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123505752182 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315368850547 0.0580467560999 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 8.37731958763 212% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.31 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 8.62886597938 313% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 8.54432989691 197% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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