You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,You are going to another country to study. You

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are tuition, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Dear Mathew,
Hope this letter finds you in the best of your health. I would inform you that I will be moving to Sydney next month for pursuing my higher studies in Western Australia University. It's a two years Masters degree program followed by an internship of six months. You probably do not know that this will be my first time outside India, I feel nervous and excited at the same time as this will be my first overseas travel, but I feel relieved that you are there to help and guide me.

The university allows me to work as part-time for twenty hours a week. I wanted to work while I study as you are aware of my financial conditions and at the same time don't want to burden my parents with tuition fee.

I remember the last time we spoke, you were working for a retail giant "Wal-Mart" as a Sourcing Head. I wanted to ask for your help to introduce me to some headhunters so that they can line up some interviews for me.

I look forward to your reply at the earliest and meeting you soon in Sydney.

Best wishes
vinshu

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mathew, Hope this letter finds you in the best o...
^^^
Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...tudies in Western Australia University. Its a two years Masters degree program foll...
^^^
Line 4, column 168, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nancial conditions and at the same time dont want to burden my parents with tuition ...
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Line 6, column 113, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...apos;Wal-Mart' as a Sourcing Head. I wanted to ask for your help to introduc...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... can line up some interviews for me. I look forward to your reply at the earli...
^
Line 10, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ting you soon in Sydney. Best wishes vinshu
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, so, while, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 857.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39487179487 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52610824782 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0023528869 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315497609665 0.216113520407 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115216147146 0.0766984524023 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697804604939 0.0603063233224 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188442777909 0.12726935374 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312375367531 0.0580467560999 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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