You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Hi John,
I hope that you are doing very well. As you may already know, I am planing to move Canada next month to study Law Science at MCH university in Toronto. The course starts on June 21st 2019 and will finish on July 2021. So, apparently, I will stay for almost 2 years. However, I'd love if you could help me finding any profession during my living there.
As we discussed last time we spoke, the college fees and the cost of living are extremely high, and I only have some money which I've obtained them from the last job. Moreover, I have no provided scholarship. Therefore, I strongly need any part-time occupations to enhance my financial situation. Furthermore, it's a golden opportunity to evolve my English language skills by practicing it in the work.
However, I will send you the updated CV of mine, so you can send it to any recruitment agency, also you can visit the job office department at my university and explain to them how much I really need to be worked, or please send me the latest vacancies lists which posed in the Canadian newspapers, so I can communicate with them from now.
I look forward to hearing from you soon,
Thanks a lot
Bilal
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Hi John, I hope that you are doing very well. As ...
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Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
... will stay for almost 2 years. However, Id love if you could help me finding any p...
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Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
.... However, Id love if you could help me finding any profession during my living there. ...
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Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... any profession during my living there. As we discussed last time we spoke, the ...
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Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
... high, and I only have some money which Ive obtained them from the last job. Moreov...
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Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ce my financial situation. Furthermore, its a golden opportunity to evolve my Engli...
^^^
Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge skills by practicing it in the work. However, I will send you the updated CV ...
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Line 6, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o I can communicate with them from now. I look forward to hearing from you soon,...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 41, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I look forward to hearing from you soon, Thanks a lot Bilal
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hearing from you soon, Thanks a lot Bilal
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 971.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58018867925 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59796915921 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683962264151 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.4374982161 44.8134815571 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2727272727 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22959047597 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074668134575 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060983576976 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138920161187 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555828130377 0.0580467560999 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.