You are looking for a part-time job at a basketball club.
Write a letter to the manager of the basketball club. In your letter,
introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
tell him/her when you think you can start
Dear Sir,
My name is Shwatank Bhasin, and I am writing this letter to express my interest in the vacant position of manager role at your National Basketball Club. In response to your advertisement, I am offering myself for the post as a deserving and skilled instructor.
I have read about the roles and responsibilities of the manager's position which requires training young and aspiring basketballers under the supervision of a skilled coach. I hereby enclosed my professional profile for your kind consideration. From my profile, you will find that under my guidance, several sports schools and clubs have produced first-class young basketballers over the past decade. I have been a basketball player all my life and led my state national team won straight for about 5 years during my supervision and leadership.
I can start on coming Monday as my current schedule is already planned for a holiday with my family. I look forward to discussing my candidacy for the announced post at your convenience and I am just a phone call away.
I am hoping to hear a positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Shwatank Bhasin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y planned for a holiday with my family. I look forward to discussing my candidacy...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nce and I am just a phone call away. I am hoping to hear a positive response. ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0752688172 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08277900915 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634408602151 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5074730963 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 4.34317383033 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205441003597 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076286188202 0.0766984524023 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486145462212 0.0603063233224 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106530131906 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704163637897 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.