You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports center that you visit.Write a letter to the manager,What the problem isHow you feel about the problemWhat steps you want the manager to take

Essay topics:

You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports center that you visit.
Write a letter to the manager,
What the problem is
How you feel about the problem
What steps you want the manager to take

I am writing this letter to complain you about the problems which I have faced, when I visited your sports center.

I was very enthralled, when I came to know that our sport match has been organized in your sports center. However, as we entered in the changing room, locks of the locker facility were working improperly which was quite disturbing.

I felt miserable because we all had travelled from other cities and we were unable to keep our personal belongings such as, mobile phones and wallets at safer place. Moreover, I have heard many good things about your sports center and it was unexpected from prestigious firm like yours.

I would like to recommend you several things to untangle this problem. Firstly, you should repair your locks as early as possible. Secondly, you can also purchase electric locker room in which you do not have to worry about the locking mechanism.

I hope, you will address this issue as soon as possible and reply me at your earliest convenience.

Yours faithfully,
Mohit Ratnu

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
...r cities and we were unable to keep our personal belongings such as, mobile phones and wallets at s...
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Line 12, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ience. Yours faithfully, Mohit Ratnu
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 860.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94252873563 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48137466749 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3055092238 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273774326042 0.216113520407 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113048546229 0.0766984524023 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931738665628 0.0603063233224 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162315452814 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110107731893 0.0580467560999 190% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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