You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,
say what the problem is
describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
ask the provider to solve the problem
Dear Manager,
I am pleasure to say my name MJ and I am writing to take two months intensive ESL course at Rosetta stone school. My university is paying for my fee, and I am taking this course on my summer vacation instead of final internship. It is expected I will pass an English Proficiency Test as a result, and be transferred a international student. Therefore, it is rather important to me that I am able to study in the best environment.
I am staying in hall of residence in this college. While my room is neat and the facilities have good conditions, but the habitat is extremely noisy from other stories. When I organized my things, I was assured I would be staying only with post-graduate or intensive-course students. However, most of the people in this dorm are doing summer-school courses due to academic failure, and they are all under 22. It seems to me they are enjoying one long party: certainly no one observes light out or turns down music despite being asked to. Actually, I watched some inappropriate scene during last night party.
I wonder if I may be moved to an accommodation which is more productive to have serious study, or I may use the remainder of my accommodation fee to go towards payment for a hotel. I really want to get your positive reply as soon as you see the email.
I look forward to delightful hearing from you.
Best wishes,
MJ
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... course on my summer vacation instead of final internship. It is expected I will ...
^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cy Test as a result, and be transferred a international student. Therefore, it is...
^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... reply as soon as you see the email. I look forward to delightful hearing from...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, may, really, so, therefore, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 247.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64777327935 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93895895108 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 127.690721649 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.672064777328 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 290.88556701 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9892967612 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6428571429 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115185873012 0.216113520407 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340980813691 0.0766984524023 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359463208471 0.0603063233224 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625441409561 0.12726935374 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167032889778 0.0580467560999 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.