You come to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace Write a letter to your manager In your letter describe the equipment explain how it might be helpful at your workplace offer help in purchasing it

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You come to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the equipment.
explain how it might be helpful at your workplace. '
offer help in purchasing it.

Dear Mr.Smith,
I am head of Human Resouce Department at your company. I would like to draw your kind attention to buy an electronic attendance machine. As its name states that this will make the attendance of employees and maintain that record internally as employees will give their any fingers impression, on a designated slot of it, at the time of in and out.

It has been noticed thatt taking attendance on register is little clumpsy as that time office needs a separate person to take attendance that might affect office work. As well as, sometimes there is a little long line of employees to sign their in time with their signatures. This delays them to reach at their workplaces five to ten minutes late. However, placing an attendance machine at the main door of office makes the things easier and help overcoming above mentioned problems.

I have searched a number of attendance machine manufaturing companies and their nearest store from where company can buy the best quality product. Even, I have sent a few emails to the dealers to enquire about it, like quality, discounted rates, with all included services. If you could permit me to meet them personally to know more about product, benefits, price and warranty. It would be good for the company.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Thanking you,
John Brown

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Smith
Dear Mr.Smith, I am head of Human Resouce Department...
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Line 4, column 448, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to overcome' or 'overcome'.
Suggestion: to overcome; overcome
...office makes the things easier and help overcoming above mentioned problems. I have sea...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1117.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 228.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89912280702 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59691719479 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65350877193 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8774400727 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9230769231 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165332867678 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575997217403 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420766521762 0.0603063233224 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828163527454 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298849107562 0.0580467560999 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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