You have applied for a job at two different companies. Both have decided to choose you. Write a letter to decline one of the job offers. In your letter, apologize for not being able to accept that position and also your circumstances for turning them down

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You have applied for a job at two different companies. Both have decided to choose you. Write a letter to decline one of the job offers. In your letter, apologize for not being able to accept that position and also your circumstances for turning them down.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to decline the job offer as a pharmacist with Hope pharmacy limited.

First of all, I would like to apologize for rejecting this job offer. Hope pharmacy is a prestigious company everybody would like to work for, but unfortunately, I will not be not accepting the post of a pharmacist with your organization.

The fundamental reason I am declining this offer, is because i accepted a job offer from George Williams hospital. they offered me the position of a senior pharmacist due to my expertise and education. I am sorry, but I believe that this position have more career prospect and development, they offered to send me on a three months training course on drug metabolism in Austria. Furthermore, the hospital is very close to my house and this will help me to curb the amount of time i spend on traffic drastically.

Once again please accept my apology. Thank you for your understanding.

Yours faithfully,

Ada Isong

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to decline the job offer as...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n I am declining this offer, is because i accepted a job offer from George Willia...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...b offer from George Williams hospital. they offered me the position of a senior pha...
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Line 7, column 482, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...will help me to curb the amount of time i spend on traffic drastically. Once...
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Line 7, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of time i spend on traffic drastically. Once again please accept my apology. Tha...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...me i spend on traffic drastically. Once again please accept my apology. Thank y...
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Line 11, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our understanding. Yours faithfully, Ada Isong
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 811.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 163.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9754601227 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02391138208 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638036809816 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8255841088 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209288161382 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922411051511 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801908493044 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140046735776 0.12726935374 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599987389822 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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