You have been offered a place at a university and wish to find suitable accommodation write a letter to the accommodation officer including the following information the type of accommodation you wish to find some details about yourself any special requir

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You have been offered a place at a university and wish to find suitable accommodation. write a letter to the accommodation officer including the following information:
the type of accommodation you wish to find some details about yourself
any special requirements you may have
and any other relevant information

Dear sir/ madam
I am Vietnamese citizen who was received offer letter from Toronto university last week so I am making a plan to go to Toronto in March. And I am extremely grateful if you would provide me some information about accommodation at your earliest convenience.
Firstly, I would like to find a room that is nearly Toronto university in order to walk easily to university And because I am going to work part time in the weekend, so I want to that room nearby bus station. However I do not bring many luggage, I only need a single room big enough to live.
Secondly, I am Asian, Canadian food does not yet familiar with me. So I want to the room contains a kitchen where I can cooking every day. It could be save fees for my life in city.
Finally, Could you tell me about the cost of the accommondation fees? If possible, would you mind sending me details prices so that I can see if they are within my budget.
I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Your faithfully
Phuc Nguyen

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to walk easily to university And because I am going to work part time in the week...
^^
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...versity And because I am going to work part time in the weekend, so I want to that room ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...I want to that room nearby bus station. However I do not bring many luggage, I only nee...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun luggage seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much luggage', 'a good deal of luggage'.
Suggestion: much luggage; a good deal of luggage
...rby bus station. However I do not bring many luggage, I only need a single room big enough t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 120, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cook'
Suggestion: cook
...the room contains a kitchen where I can cooking every day. It could be save fees for m...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 828.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 189.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38095238095 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56286815129 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650793650794 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3805353992 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2727272727 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 4.34317383033 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138416541261 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468476586141 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527093661036 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732149995835 0.12726935374 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488126939271 0.0580467560999 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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