You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are problems with this and you find it difficult to work. write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter- describe the situation- explain the pro

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are problems with this and you find it difficult to work. write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter
- describe the situation
- explain the problems and why it is diffieult to work
- say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Mr Petter,
I am Phuc Nguyen who have been living in dormitory at 123 room for almost one year now.Recently the first year student Laura arrived there last month and stay with me. We are happy here and would like to thank you for all the help you have give us. However, I feel something should be done about light bulb in our room.
Yesterday, when I came back room after class, the light in our room is not working. I tried many times effort but it was not light. It is hard to learn and living in the dark. I could not find anything in my room. And I was given task design pano for event which take place in college next week, it is difficult to do without have light.
I would highly appreciate if you could replace the new light bulb for our room as soon as possible.
I look forward to hearing from you in the near future
Your faithfully
Phuc Nguyen

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Recently
...ory at 123 room for almost one year now.Recently the first year student Laura arrived th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'times'' or 'time's'?
Suggestion: times'; time's
...n our room is not working. I tried many times effort but it was not light. It is hard...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 701.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.19760479042 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.0213816367 2.54303337028 79% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664670658683 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4860217423 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.1 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198503620279 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695871150605 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354688560752 0.0603063233224 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116274920393 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329867851877 0.0580467560999 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 8.37731958763 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 89.08 70.7449484536 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.32 7.59969072165 83% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 41.2886597938 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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