You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw Write a letter to the company In your letter Introduce your self explain the situation say what action you would like to company to take

To the after-sale service department,

My name is Jim and I purchased a Y460A model Lenovo leptop three days ago from a retailer. I am writing to report a hardware defection in the compter.

Yesterday, I was watching movie on the leptop without a charger plugged into the computer. Soon I noticed that the remaining of battery electricity was declining. After the percentage dwindled to 20%, I plugged the charger to load the battery electricity to full. However, the situation of battery electricity decreasing rapidly happened. Therefore, I doubt that the battery in my computer is a defective one.

I demand a replacement of the computer with malfunction battery. If you content my request, please reply me how to proceed. If you have alternative solution to this issue, please reply me at your earliest convenience.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,
Jim Pan

Votes
Average: 5.9 (3 votes)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 754.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 144.0 206.0 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23611111111 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.46410161514 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03601707692 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 127.690721649 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638888888889 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.9100738484 44.8134815571 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.8333333333 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.0 16.8248392259 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 4.34317383033 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113468831076 0.216113520407 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402347683701 0.0766984524023 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042746227467 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533855680467 0.12726935374 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479709358453 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.2 7.45979381443 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.