You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it

Essay topics:

You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work. Write a letter to your manager and say
– What problem do you have?
– What difficulties does this create for you?
– What could be done about it?

Dear sir,

With due respect, I am writing this letter to bring to your notice, the problems that i am facing due to poor performance of my laptop and I request you to issue me a new laptop so that it do not effect my work.

First of all, I would like to mention that I am using this laptop from last seven years and due to wear and tear its performance has really degraded. I am continuously facing one or the other problem that hampers my work. Its battery backup has reached the lowest leve that means it did not work for even one minute without a charger powered with electricity. last week I went to meet my client at library and could not even start my laptop due to this issue, that was really embarrassing for me, somehow I managed to explain my project to him. Also its memory is almost full due to large amount of data and office applications installed on it, consequently its speed is really slow.

I request you to replace my laptop with new laptop with all the required data and application installed on it, so that it do not disturb my office work. I would submit the laptop to hardware and maintenance staff when you approve my request.
It would be really appreciated, if you consider my issues seriously and take appropriate action as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely
Harry

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...bring to your notice, the problems that i am facing due to poor performance of my...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...issue me a new laptop so that it do not effect my work. First of all, I would lik...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aptop so that it do not effect my work. First of all, I would like to mention th...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
...out a charger powered with electricity. last week I went to meet my client at librar...
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Line 5, column 547, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... managed to explain my project to him. Also its memory is almost full due to large ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, really, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 32.9175257732 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1071.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 238.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50836113304 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 332.1 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7463240775 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.1 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 16.8248392259 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173933835024 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773569761056 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460307551377 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118192386771 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413614170437 0.0580467560999 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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