You have recently visited a local school in your community It needs people who can help renovate the building and also help with some activities Write a letter to the principal of the school and say How would you be able to help When and why would you do

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You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people who can help renovate the building and also help with some activities. Write a letter to the principal of the school and say
– How would you be able to help?
– When and why would you do it?
– Who will help you to do it?

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am one the visitors of the school last week. I had a great weekend and writing to let you know that school needs renovation and some activities, willing to help my colleagues.

I noticed that second building wall paintings are completely washed away and physical teacher will be on leave for next two months. I am part of the Social Club of our company and we regulary carrout some activities to help in the community. With your permission it is a pleasure to help the school and enrich our locality.

On Saturdays, we can conduct some of the activities for kids like games, sports and excursions. We will ensure to take care of the activities planned by trainee on this day. SImilary we can paint on sundays where there wont be a school and can avoid any potential damage to kids.

I Have already discussed with my club mates of the above plan and are excited to do. We will make a detailed plan for the next two months with volunteers and shall share if you permit us.

Awaiting for your confirmation.

Yours Sincerely,
Sumanth

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ies, willing to help my colleagues. I noticed that second building wall paint...
^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r will be on leave for next two months. I am part of the Social Club of our compa...
^
Line 7, column 30, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ality. On Saturdays, we can conduct some of the activities for kids like games, sports ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: AWAITING_FOR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'awaiting' or 'waiting for'?
Suggestion: Awaiting; Waiting for
...rs and shall share if you permit us. Awaiting for your confirmation. Yours Sincerely, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65263157895 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54795556522 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626315789474 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.100103842 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27111473974 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900842747214 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716559184549 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134757046222 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764201113079 0.0580467560999 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ies, willing to help my colleagues. I noticed that second building wall paint...
^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r will be on leave for next two months. I am part of the Social Club of our compa...
^
Line 7, column 30, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ality. On Saturdays, we can conduct some of the activities for kids like games, sports ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: AWAITING_FOR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'awaiting' or 'waiting for'?
Suggestion: Awaiting; Waiting for
...rs and shall share if you permit us. Awaiting for your confirmation. Yours Sincerely, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65263157895 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54795556522 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626315789474 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.100103842 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27111473974 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900842747214 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716559184549 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134757046222 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764201113079 0.0580467560999 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.