You have stayed at a friend’s house last weekend and forgot your watch there.Write a letter to him/her and say Thank him/her for the weekend stay.Describe your watch and where you could have left it.Suggest a way how to get it back.َ

Essay topics:

You have stayed at a friend’s house last weekend and forgot your watch there.Write a letter to him/her and say Thank him/her for the weekend stay.Describe your watch and where you could have left it.Suggest a way how to get it back.َ

Dear behzad,

I hope this letter finds you in good health.I would like to take this opportunity to express my gratitude for my stay at your home in Adelaide last weekend, while you were away on the business trip.I had a pleasant time over there.I find Adelaide is very interesting for shopping.I bought a brand new Rolex wrist watch for my wife, from Rundle street shopping centre.I was actually tempted by the fascinating brown colour strap and square shaped dial.The dial has roman numbers too.I am very excited about it.Unfortunately, I couldn’t find it in my luggage when I am back to Sydney.I remember that I have kept it in your living room cupboard safe box.I want to gift it to my wife on her birthday next week and surprise her.Actually, one of my colleagues is travelling to Sydney from your place this week end.I can request him to collect it from you.He lives just a couple of miles away from your apartment.I will pass your address and contact number to him.I think you can hand it over to him without any trouble.His name is “Brad Ryan”, around 40 years old.Please check his identity card before you hand over the stuff.

I hope to see you soon in Sydney.

Yours’ Lovingly,

Sudabeh

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... in my luggage when I am back to Sydney.I remember that I have kept it in your li...
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...on in Sydney. Yours' Lovingly, Sudabeh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, so, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1025.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83490566038 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67110692612 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.702830188679 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 12.6804123711 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 70.0 16.3608247423 428% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 527.267378935 44.8134815571 1177% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 341.666666667 76.5299724578 446% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 70.6666666667 16.8248392259 420% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 4.34317383033 246% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 2.54639175258 864% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277591006371 0.216113520407 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150893985549 0.0766984524023 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836050784512 0.0603063233224 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160306392661 0.12726935374 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818403084905 0.0580467560999 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.7 8.37731958763 438% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.89 70.7449484536 13% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.4 7.45979381443 394% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.92 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.53 7.59969072165 139% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 8.62886597938 637% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.0 8.54432989691 351% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 8.15463917526 368% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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