Some people believe that the government should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire.Others say individuals should save during their working years to fund their own retirement.What is your opinion?Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.
It is true that when people advance into their golden years, they require more help and attention.For that reason, a significant number of people hold the opinion that the government should provide financial assistance to the elderly.However, I tend to agree with those who argue that workers should be saving a portion of their income to have a nest egg in their retirement.
To begin with, a culture of saving rather than depending on the government may foster the overall economic development of a country.In other words, if people were to accumulate their own savings for their pension age, it would lessen the financial burden on the government.As a result, the government would be able to release more funds to more productive purposes, such as development of infrastructure, industries, hospitals, and so on, which may expedite the overall progression of a country.
In addition to economic factors, putting money aside has some personal benefits.Since savings-oriented people are not dependent on the state for their living expenses, this may instill a sense of self-respect and pride in them.On the other hand, those who are reliant on financial assistance very often face the negative societal stigma, as many people consider them to be inferior and unworthy members of society.Hence, to live a life with dignity and pride, taking responsibility for funding one’s own retirement is evidently a better option from individual perspective.
In contrast, the provision of monetary outlays for retirees has proven unfeasible in many countries.Since in many nations the number of senior citizens is on the rise, in the long run governments are likely to struggle to sustain the cost of providing for the elderly.The early signs of this have been seen in many countries that were forced to raise the retirement age.Therefore, in the foreseeable future, these kinds of support may become completely unsustainable.
In conclusion, the provision of state monetary support may undoubtedly lessen the concern of retirees to some extent.However, considering the issue of sustainability of this provision, it is better to opt for individual savings from the very beginning of working life, for the benefit of both individual and national development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23657681483 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557746478873 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.2975951904 350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.9763604612 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 383.4 106.682146367 359% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.0 20.7667163134 342% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 34.0 7.06120827912 482% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298038106398 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15851808884 0.084324248473 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812630737041 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15851808884 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812630737041 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.5 13.0946893788 302% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.05 50.2224549098 -18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.2 11.3001002004 285% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.22 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.56 8.58950901804 135% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.1190380762 300% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.7795591182 269% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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