You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter:
• Explain why you want to do the voluntary work.
• State what your skills and experience are.
• Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam
You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Bhawna Sharma and I am writing to express my interest in working with your voluntary organization. I learned about your work from a weekly magazine ‘The tribune’ and would like to be associated with a reputed charity organization like yours.
I am currently studying Modern Arts and Culture Program from New York University and am required to participate in voluntary work as part of my last year's thesis report. I have a keen interest in doing voluntary work and have previously worked with the “Khalsa” group to organize meals for flood-affected people in Kerela, India. Apart from this, I hold an experience of cooking and serving food on religious ceremonies in Gurudwara. Here, I would like to extend my contribution to cooking meals on your trips abroad. In addition to this, I can speak Hindi, Punjabi and Mandarin fluently.
If given a chance I would like to be part of your coming tour to Cambodia in August. Moreover, I assure you that I would be available on Saturdays and Sundays till the commencement of my academic session from September.
I hope you would consider my credentials and provide me the opportunity to work with your organization. If considered, I am available for an interview this week.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours Faithfully,
Bhawna Sharma
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...as part of my last years thesis report. I have a keen interest in doing voluntary...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ndi, Punjabi and Mandarin fluently. If given a chance I would like to be part ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, so, apart from, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1128.0 937.175257732 120% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10407239819 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10958180251 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58371040724 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 354.6 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7772924277 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7692307692 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152476574557 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557357150525 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330985473537 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938875103847 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199772345124 0.0580467560999 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 41.2886597938 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 8.62886597938 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.