You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that.Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter,•introduce yourself•describe the prob

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You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that.

Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter,

• introduce yourself

• describe the problems

• explain what type of room you would prefer

Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to seek your permission to permit me to change my current hostel room to a new accommodation which is more comfortable as well as suitable for studies due to some reasons. Let me explain in further detail

I am Prabhpreet Kaur, first-year student of MBA Course from Amity university. My student enrolment number is 154623. I am staying in room number 45 in the college hostel which is not very pleasant and satisfactory.

I find it very difficult to stay in the current room as the room is very small with no proper ventilation which is very suffocating. Moreover, the room is very stuffy with no place to walk due to which we were hurt several times with sharp edges.

I would request you to shift me to a new room which is big and airy so that there are no breathing issues as well as all the furniture and the bed are stacked properly so that there is enough place to walk easily and so one gets hurt.

I hope you will consider my situation and will change to a room which has more place to walk and windows for fresh air to come inside the room.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Prabhpreet Kaur

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: AND_SO_ONE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'and so on' (="etc.")?
Suggestion: and so on
...at there is enough place to walk easily and so one gets hurt. I hope you will consider m...
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Line 17, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on. Yours sincerely, Prabhpreet Kaur
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 967.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47685185185 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47885433071 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560185185185 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 290.7 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9504426467 44.8134815571 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7 76.5299724578 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 4.34317383033 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236899798505 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088941558388 0.0766984524023 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637681301544 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108274869609 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400420111369 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 70.7449484536 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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