You live in a room in a college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situation

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You live in a room in a college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter
describe the situation
explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to inform you that due to current arrangements to share college hostel room with another student my grades in the last semester examinations has been very low as I found it hard to concentrate on my studies.

There are couple of problems which I face due to the room sharing arrangements. The student with whom I share my room always play music due to which I am not able to focus on my study. He always make the room dirty and untide which wastes my time and efforts to arrange the stuff in a proper manner. Moreover, my roommate often party with his friend s inside the room as a result I am not able to study hard and complete my projects in a timely manner. I believe this arrangement will spoil my objective of enrolling into the current course and opting for a accommodation inside college premises got more time to study.

I would rather prefer to get an accommodation wherein I will not share my room with another student. The another option which will work is to have some kind of partition arrangement within the room so that it will give space to study. I am looking forward to hear from you regarding new accommodation to be made available for me.

Thanking you
ABC

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...ot able to focus on my study. He always make the room dirty and untide which wastes ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper manner" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y time and efforts to arrange the stuff in a proper manner. Moreover, my roommate often party with...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 434, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a timely manner" with adverb for "timely"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... to study hard and complete my projects in a timely manner. I believe this arrangement will spoil ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 557, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... into the current course and opting for a accommodation inside college premises g...
^
Line 4, column 557, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
... into the current course and opting for a accommodation inside college premises got more time t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 257, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...ve space to study. I am looking forward to hear from you regarding new accommodation to...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, moreover, regarding, so, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1003.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 223.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49775784753 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58186947597 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565022421525 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 322.2 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.652978739 44.8134815571 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 4.34317383033 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293624888428 0.216113520407 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127849393537 0.0766984524023 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550548377875 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211954233094 0.12726935374 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388132412153 0.0580467560999 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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