You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store. However, you are not pleased with the service which you received.Write a letter to the store manager.In the letter,-Describe the situation.-Explain why you are dissatisfied-Say what you want

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You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store. However, you are not pleased with the service which you received.
Write a letter to the store manager.
In the letter,
-Describe the situation.
-Explain why you are dissatisfied
-Say what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir,
I am writing to convey my dissatisfaction on a recent visit to your store in regards to fix the computer which I bought the last week.

To elucidate I had purchased a MacBook from your electronic store and recently I have faced some technical issues with its battery. The power backup of the laptop does not last even five minutes when the charger is disconnected from the mains supply. I had explained the situation to one of your Customer service officers and after the detailed analysis of the technical issue, he assured to get the problem resolved within 2 days.

It has been almost a week now and I haven't received my laptop despite giving numerous reminders to your staff. I had bought this computer to prepare project related work for my exams which are due next week and thus my work is also getting affected due to this situation. Thus I request you to expedite on this situation and provide a new replacement for my laptop and send it to my mailing address.

I look forward to your immediate response and resolution.
Yours sincerely
Ben

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing to convey my dissatisfactio...
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Line 2, column 75, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...faction on a recent visit to your store in regards to fix the computer which I bought the las...
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Line 4, column 433, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...get the problem resolved within 2 days. It has been almost a week now and I have...
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Line 6, column 37, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... It has been almost a week now and I havent received my laptop despite giving numer...
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Line 6, column 273, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...getting affected due to this situation. Thus I request you to expedite on this situa...
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Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...esponse and resolution. Yours sincerely Ben
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70744680851 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6201492723 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627659574468 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9278405877 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.22222222222 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172455402744 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608240589867 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426829688918 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909623793114 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044078250808 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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