You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Dear Haruka,
Hello Haruka. I am writing a reply to your letter that asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. I thing trying to get a job is better for you. I would like to write reasons why.
At first, I will mention about the disadvantage of going to college. I think you would not enjoy it, because in a college, especially Japanese college, you could only meet people who are around same age as you. You just have already met such a people in your junior high school and high school. In addition to it, many students tend to just have fun with friends beside study. The reason why this happen, it is usually very difficult to enter Japanese colleges but to graduate it is not so difficult. For that reason, many students tend to just have enjoy, like having parties, going out, going travel. However college costs a huge of money on you. The fee of it is not cheap of course. I think it is waste of money to go to college.
Next, I would tell you why getting a job is good idea for you. The most valuable point is experience. Not like college, you can see many people from different age of you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good for you. Not only from people, you can also get importance from working. You could know how different to earn the money and also you can know many social system as well.
Lastly I would like to suggest the types of job that would be suitable for you. I think you good at talking with people, so the reception of company, school or hotel would be good. You can meet not only collegue but also many people of customers. If you would get a job of hotel, you can use your English skill as well.
In conclusion, I should try to get a job for these reason. Good luck for you.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 131, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
...go to college or to try to get a job. I thing trying to get a job is better for you. ...
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Line 2, column 176, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... trying to get a job is better for you. I would like to write reasons why. At ...
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Line 4, column 551, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...reason, many students tend to just have enjoy, like having parties, going out, going ...
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Line 4, column 604, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...aving parties, going out, going travel. However college costs a huge of money on you. T...
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Line 6, column 206, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 206, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
... you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good for you. N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, so, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 4.92783505155 365% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 32.9175257732 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 26.3917525773 193% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 937.175257732 155% => OK
No of words: 344.0 206.0 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.20930232558 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14009566715 2.54303337028 84% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 127.690721649 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468023255814 0.622605031667 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 290.88556701 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.13402061856 197% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 12.6804123711 197% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.262848511 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 57.92 76.5299724578 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.76 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 7.41237113402 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439760556296 0.216113520407 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138828162875 0.0766984524023 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125491014133 0.0603063233224 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303796556777 0.12726935374 239% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104270692532 0.0580467560999 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.3 8.37731958763 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.55 8.71597938144 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.44 7.59969072165 85% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.