You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he / she should get a job.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter- Say why he / she would not enjoy going to college- Exp

Dear Steve,

Thank you for your letter. I am glad to hear that you as well as your girlfriend are well, and your mother's operation was successful and she is doing fine now. I am quite excited to know that you have completed your higher secondary education with flying colors, and you need my advice to make an important decision if you should go for further study or search for a job.

I can understand it is a tough choice to make but I am sure that you will choose wisely. I strongly suggest that you should go for a job. The primary reason being the cost associated with the further studies. As your family has just come out from a financial crisis, the cost can be overwhelming. I feel that you should postpone your graduation for a while. A job will allow you to save money, which later can be used to fund your education.

As you have taken a vocational training in a manufacturing industry, I would suggest searching for a job in this sector. This will not only give you a great experience but also will help you in the future as you are planning to study mechanical engineering in the future. You can also choose to work as Ola or Uber driver and earn a decent income. However, I will recommend the first option as it suits your interests.

Let me know what do you think about my suggestion, and feel free to shoot a mail if you have more questions.

Best of Luck,
Nazir Sumara

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...or further study or seach for a job. I can understand it is a tough choice to ...
^
Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... I am sure that you will choose wisely. I strongly suggest that you should go for...
^
Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...to fund your education. As you have took a vocational training in manufacturing ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ing to study the mechanical engineering in future. You can also choose to work as Ola or ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 261.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47126436782 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50510261551 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570881226054 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 359.1 290.88556701 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.570458267 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269710500467 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986926033892 0.0766984524023 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076806860435 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164676365016 0.12726935374 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573749878564 0.0580467560999 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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