You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good You want to tell him how you feel Write a letter to the singer In your letter say how you feel about his performance give details of your music related activities explain how you

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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel.
Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

say how you feel about his performance
give details of your music-related activities
explain how you would like him to help you with your music-related activities
Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ……………,

Dear Arijit,
My name is Shyam and I had gotten a chance to attend the performance of the band "Life Rocks" staged at Park Hyatt on 10th December, 2020. I am writing to let you know how amazing your role was as a vocalist. I am a guitarist myself and we are a team of five who dream to reach greater heights in this industry so it would be really great if you could revert back with your suggestions.
Let me begin with how speechless your performance had made me. Although the performance lasted for a short span, your selection of songs had made my day by taking me back to my college days. I am so glad that I decided to make it to the event. Also, your voice has been outstanding thereby making me a proud fan. Overall performance was way beyond my expectations in a way that I found myself very rejuvenating post the concert.
Since my childhood, I have been aspiring to be a popular musician. Talented people like you always inspire me which drives me to excel at what I do. For instance, I have been able to form a band of my own in which I am the lead Guitarist. We perform as a band at local pubs and restaurants.
I personally think that you deserve the fame you have as you are a self-built person. Because I want to make my passion benefit the public, I thought I would take your advice in preparing myself for the challenges that this field could give us. Additionally, it would be really appreciated if you could help me with some contacts.
Hoping to hear from you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Shyam

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 134, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'December 2020'.
Suggestion: December 2020
...ocks' staged at Park Hyatt on 10th December, 2020. I am writing to let you know how amazi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, for instance, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 32.9175257732 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1244.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 284.0 206.0 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38028169014 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6503303833 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 127.690721649 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570422535211 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 385.2 290.88556701 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9963037139 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1764705882 76.5299724578 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58823529412 4.34317383033 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24652296186 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831006244732 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812029805488 0.0603063233224 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145531895291 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631014221377 0.0580467560999 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 8.37731958763 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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